tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9104678730176687014.post2602458452484753765..comments2014-12-12T18:07:42.274-05:00Comments on Seminar in Composition : Final Project: Rough DraftAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9104678730176687014.post-89689151279878861672014-12-05T20:29:04.166-05:002014-12-05T20:29:04.166-05:00Your intro is engaging. However, when you ask thi...Your intro is engaging. However, when you ask this: " Her portrayal in the story makes a statement on the original tale and the values behind it.” it seems like you should, at the least, be able to articulate what that statement is, and not just that it exists.<br /><br />Asking who symbolizes who, then summarizing the myth, then asking again is awkward - very likely the summary belongs right after your introduction.<br /><br />I think the idea that “God” is equal to the “sacred concept of humanity” is a good one, and highly defensible. But I think you need to defend it in a little more depth, likely including material in the 2nd and 3rd novels, and even delving into Lilith’s own tortured thoughts on the matter. You actually do this last one pretty well, but you could do more to explain what it means that even Lilith shares this “sacred” notion of humanity.<br /><br />Your discussion of demons is fine, and probably doesn’t need a whole lot more.<br /><br />Is it so obvious that there is no Adam? While I agree that there’s no obvious Adam, the candidates (Jdaya, who is after all a male, and Paul Titus, the first male human she encounters, are the most obvious ones) are interesting and meaningful.<br /><br />Overall: You clearly understand the myth and have some general ideas about its role in the novel. I’d like to see you incorporate all three novels more clearly. More importantly, I want to know more clearly why this matters, and what your unique contribution is. It’s one thing to note that the myth plays a role in the novel - it’s quite another to help us read the novel through it. You even begin on the idea of interpretation, and the fact that the Lilith myth has been through some interesting interpretive changes - *show* us some nimble interpretation, don’t just tell us that Lilith has previously been subject to some. Clarify and focus around what the myth signifies to you as a reader of Octavia Butler.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com