tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9104678730176687014.post5708003440892018823..comments2014-12-12T18:07:42.274-05:00Comments on Seminar in Composition : Final ProjectAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9104678730176687014.post-84461171599331157082014-12-11T11:06:19.718-05:002014-12-11T11:06:19.718-05:00I actually don't have very much to say at this...I actually don't have very much to say at this point, so I'll keep it brief. It was already a very interesting project, with a number of minor problem. From my point of view, you've fixed all of the noticeable problems (for instance, you've explained why it's hard to pin down Abbey's variety of mysticism, which bothered me a lot in the draft), you've smoothed out the transitions, and clarified the flow of the argument. In this version, you articulate and briefly advocate for Abbey's mystical anarchism through a detailed but never excessive analysis of the relevant parts of his life and work.<br /><br />It's very good work, which preserves and builds upon all your strengths through the course of the semester.<br /><br />The ending is a little abrupt, or underdeveloped - I think in your previous draft you'd worried about whether it was too melodramatic, and I guess maybe it is, a little, but even if I'm not totally satisfied with the ending, I think you needed *something* along these lines to explain why Abbey matters to you, and should matter to us.<br /><br />Excellent work.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com