Matthew
Gerstbrein
Dr.
Adam Johns
English
Composition 0200
17
September 2014
River Relationships
There have been two separate
scenarios in the story thus far in which a river has played an integral role,
giving meaning to the text and book as a whole. The rivers carry many meanings,
and the number of interpretations that can be made about them, based on the
person reading the book, is incredibly large. So far we have seen a river play
a very prominent role in the chapter “Rocks”, and the chapter “Down the River”.
Within this essay, I will attempt to summarize and derive the meaning of what
was discussed in class about “Rocks”, and relate that to “Down the River”.
“Rocks” tells the story of two men
that are destroyed by greed and ignorance. Husk gambles his entire life, and
that of his family’s, into the mining business. His major risk is described
with the quote “He had left behind a seventy-acre farm in the East Texas
pinelands, a Fordson tractor and lesser implements, two purebred Blue Tick
coondogs and his father, A. T. Husk Senior, to look after things. All except
the old man had been mortgaged to finance the hunt for new wealth and a new
life. For Albert Husk was a man of vision.” (Abbey 83). “Vision” is one way of
stating his nature, but I believe a more fitting term is “blind greed”. He makes contact with Graham, and sets up the
business relationship.
When the partnership turns sour,
Billy-Joe is caught up in the turmoil, again because Husk involved his entire
family in his gamble. It is at this point that the river enters the story.
Billy-Joe must cling to a tree in order to survive. Once the flood enters the
valley, the tree is uprooted, and Billy-Joe uses it to float on as he travels
down the river. Floating down the river, he endures an experience described by “Now
began for the boy what was for him, an unreckoned, uncountable series of days
and nights. His life became dreamlike…A golden dream which grew day by day more
golden, more dreamlike, on the golden water under the inescapable eye of the
golden desert sun…the light came down on his naked body from above, from the
burnished walls on either side, from the dazzling play and sparkle of the water
itself.” (Abbey 99). A few sentences later, the excruciating agony is depicted
by “Finally he must have given up those efforts and remained entirely on the
tree, making no move whatever as the rays of the sun, direct and reflected,
seared his flesh, baked his brain within its skull, poisoned the marrow of his
bones.” (Abbey 99). This experience eventually ends up killing him. The meaning
behind this story is a religious metaphor for Jesus dying on the cross. Both
deaths are on trees, and neither can physically escape their fate once it has
started. The river represents another idea, the passage of time. Time flows
continuously, just like the water down the channel. And the time was no longer
broken into segmented intervals, days; it was just one long continuous stretch.
The only change throughout the time was whether the scorching sun was present
or not.
I believe this same idea can be
translated into the chapter “Down the River”. Newcomb and Abbey embark on this
adventure down the Colorado River to see the natural beauty, before state parks
turn the area into an easily accessible tourist site. During this adventure,
time is almost meaningless to them. “This is the seventh day-or is it the
ninth?-of our dreamlike voyage” (Abbey 245) writes Abbey at the end of the
adventure, reflecting on what he experienced. He and Newcomb are also in
somewhat of a dreamlike state. They experienced a different type of life as
they floated down the river, just as Billy-Joe did. However, the idea of
emerging as a new man after the experience only holds true for the story of
Abbey and Newcomb. The trip taught them to look for some new meaning in life,
but in the case of Billy-Joe, the experience was not life-changing, it was
life-ending.
While that major difference remains,
one main parallelism of the stories is the religious/philosophical element.
This was already explained in “Rocks”, but this isn’t a hard idea to decipher
in “Down the River”. Multiple different philosophical conversations occur
between Abbey and Newcomb, such as “’Who is Ralph Newcomb’ I say. ‘Who is he?’ ‘Aye’
he says, ‘and who is who? Which is which?’ ‘Quite,’ I agree.” (Abbey 232). Just
as they have lost sense of time, they have lost sense of self. They are simply
part of the bigger picture, united in the idea of being a part of the
wilderness. These philosophical conversations also include the topic of God,
and the origins of life.
While the endings of these two
chapters are quite different, the themes tied to the stories are very similar.
These themes help relate the chapters to each other, and support the
understanding of one another.
Works Cited
Abbey,
Edward. Desert Solitaire: A Season in the Wilderness. New York: Ballantine,
1971. Print.
I think this essay was well written and I can see you had a clear path that you wanted to go down, but I don’t know if you fully finished them. For example, I think you could have expanded more on the quotes from the second body paragraph instead of citing so much. They definitely help, but the ideas aren’t fully formed. Also, I think the connection between Abbey’s river voyage and that of Billy-Joe is rough, but again, I can see where you are going. However, your last body paragraph fits nicely since it alludes to the second body paragraph and leads to the conclusion. Overall, I think you have some very good ideas and analysis on the prompt and the book as a whole, but fully expanding on these ideas and analysis could be a little more extensive. Be hesitant on using words like ‘I’ or ‘we’ in an essay. I would also be cautious when saying that you will attempt to summarize what’s going on since it may come across as not having a specific goal in this paper. Finally, I could not find a definite and solid thesis; you say what you are going to prove but not in a proper format. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI agree that the river is complex - but your introduction only restates that fairly obvious fact, rather than saying what, in particular, *you* will argue about that complexity.
ReplyDeleteYour quote is too long in the 2nd paragraph - it's a simple point that doesn't demand such a long quote. Recognizing that "vision" == "blind greed" here is smart. Abbey uses this sort of inversion habitually, and it's important to grasp that.
Your third paragraph is ok, except for one thing - it's much too long, given that you're summarizing material that any observant reader (let alone anyone in our class) should recognize. A distilled version of this paragraph would have been better.
The time saved by compressing the first several paragraphs could have been spent on a deeper analysis of Newcomb & Abbey. You claim that they emerge as new men. Can you prove it? I agree that time flows differently on the river - but can you say more about why that matters, or what you want us to take away from that observation?
In the second to last paragraph, I think you do start to pin down what's going on with both time and ideas: their sense of self is dissolving. Good! Ideally, you would have managed to explain this as early as the first paragraph, then spent more effort on proving it and, most of all, presenting why it matters. Is it a good thing for his sense of self to begin to dissolve? Does that bring him closer to Ralph? To God? To the land? To the people who lived on the river long ago? My point is that you've gotten to a very interesting *starting* point.